tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post3967987951900257999..comments2024-01-04T16:09:05.861+11:00Comments on 1000 Words: BLACKOUT page 1jasonbhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10536124614940286712noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-64222022556412168452007-09-07T12:34:00.000+10:002007-09-07T12:34:00.000+10:00Thanks everyone for the kind comments. Everyone is...Thanks everyone for the kind comments. Everyone is so cool saying things like, "they get confused easily" etc.<BR/><BR/>But my stuff has never confused you in the past, so it's my fault this time. But hey, It's nice to get a kick up the butt every now and then to stop one getting complacent!jasonbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10536124614940286712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-60214448470453796042007-09-07T06:10:00.000+10:002007-09-07T06:10:00.000+10:00I just wanted to make a clarification about my com...I just wanted to make a clarification about my comments at 9thW. I did comment about the "Shoonk" sound, and might've been confused about the "It's not polite to stare" quote bubble, but like you said, the sum sorta had the parts competing with each other for attention. The art without the text does flow well, and I probably just get confused easily, too, so it wasn't the artwork that factored into my confusion.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-76917631201714457392007-09-05T16:03:00.000+10:002007-09-05T16:03:00.000+10:00..loved the colors and the moodiness and the first.....loved the colors and the moodiness and the first page with Mohinder remembering all that had happened. I thought it flowed ..except for the part where 'Mo' was elbowed into that room..did he land at the foot of a bed? ..totally enjoy your work. I think you are your biggest critic since your fans get so excited and jazzed whenever you do a GN, like me!..can't wait 'til the next part. .. thanks! SheindieDoc_Bohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02675106719031633046noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-58858721668227336622007-09-05T14:16:00.001+10:002007-09-05T14:16:00.001+10:00Man, you are hard on yourself. It read well, and t...Man, you are hard on yourself. It read well, and the coloring was spot ON! I couldn't get the imagery out of my head to focus on my first class because it was that moving. Stick to this "moody style of coloring," I love it, it even works better that Kwok's stuff, amazing in and of itself. And the sound effects didn't hurt it at all, IMHO, it enhanced it.<BR/><BR/>Keep up the good work!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-53611799418094055562007-09-05T14:16:00.000+10:002007-09-05T14:16:00.000+10:00Man, you are hard on yourself. It read well, and t...Man, you are hard on yourself. It read well, and the coloring was spot ON! I couldn't get the imagery out of my head to focus on my first class because it was that moving. Stick to this "moody style of coloring," I love it, it even works better that Kwok's stuff, amazing in and of itself. And the sound effects didn't hurt it at all, IMHO, it enhanced it.<BR/><BR/>Keep up the good work!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-89123122835810152952007-09-05T10:56:00.000+10:002007-09-05T10:56:00.000+10:00Jas, I'm not a professional artist either, and I d...Jas, I'm not a professional artist either, and I didn't notice what you said about the flow. What I liked a lot about this novel is that it appeared you were experimenting with the color scheme. You have scenes with regular colors, black and white and a hazy orange all in one novel. It made for a good effect, imho, but it was different so I guess some people (maybe including yourself) might not have liked the end look of it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-1601054560929917412007-09-05T09:45:00.000+10:002007-09-05T09:45:00.000+10:00Jas, you know I'm a fan. But even with a totally u...Jas, you know I'm a fan. But even with a totally unclouded mind, I liked this comic a lot more than you did, I think. :) I thought the flow was fine (though Lee gives a good suggestion), the art was beautiful ('specially the electricity orgasm in the end) and the story was just fine. I assume we'll learn more about the Primatech guy in Part 2--and if we don't, I just chalk it up to, well, a Primatech guy at the hospital. <BR/><BR/>You said awhile ago that the story is cute and simple. Maybe <I>Blackout</I> was quaint in comparison to the grand epic that was <I>The Death of Hana Gitelman</I>, but I was wholly satisfied with this issue. <BR/><BR/>Discussion boards be damned.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-43881260902946657382007-09-05T09:28:00.000+10:002007-09-05T09:28:00.000+10:00Interesting take on your own comic, Jason.I actual...Interesting take on your own comic, Jason.<BR/><BR/>I actually thought it flowed pretty well -- my only issue with it, of course, were the medical inconsistencies. But that really has nothing to do with you.<BR/><BR/>I'm curious to know why you think the sum of the parts is less than the whole here. I didn't really get where it was pulling the story in three totally different directions, aside from the fact that Mohinder ran into a guy from Primatech there.<BR/><BR/>The whole GN had a very flashback-ish feel to me. I don't know if it was just the colouring or what. Maybe he was having a flashback and I just don't know it yet? Hmm.<BR/><BR/>If you felt you made a mistake by not going back and double-checking the layouts, then you probably did make a mistake. Though I'm not an artist (I can't draw to save my life), I'd liken this to writing an essay (which is something I do regularly). Even when I have a finished product, or a rough draft that I really think works well, I <B>always</B> go back and look at it. Why? Because I catch the little inconsistencies. I think the same thing applies here.<BR/><BR/>So next time, although I do understand that doing these GNs is very time-consuming and can be a bit rushed, take ten minutes to glance over the layouts and make sure you have them the way you want them before everything's finished. I can assure you it'll save you a lot of headaches in the future.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28472448.post-37215824453412946402007-09-05T09:24:00.000+10:002007-09-05T09:24:00.000+10:00Having been privilaged enough to see the completed...Having been privilaged enough to see the completed artwork before it was published and before the words were added to the page it did 'read' differently.<BR/>I think the biggest issue is the corridor scene, at least that has the most commentary so far too. It's a scene of convenience. In one corridor you have the director, Mohinder, a Primatech 'salesman' and the closest open doorway leading to a 'special' in a critical condition, who also has the same disease that Mohinder can cure. It's too much and without knowing what happens next the reader is going to have trouble processing all that at once.<BR/>Simplest change I could think of would be to have the director dismiss Mohinder, then walk away to greet a Primatech salesperson. Mohinder, rather than be pushed into a room could have a reason for entering a room (further away) which contianed the patient. This still gives you all the elemnets of the story that are there today. More improtantly the story would flow from one scene to the next a lot better, rather than being, literally and figuratively, pushed from one to the next. <BR/>Of course, hindsight is always 20/20.Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01814859750536171141noreply@blogger.com